Here’s something I edited.  I found nine mistakes.

                       BEFORE YOU WATCH THE VIDEO​​
                         Write this down on a piece of paper.
                         Edit it.
                         How many changes did you make?

• Nowaday, people in social more and more become to be busier. Parents usually don’t have time to take care of their children. So along with the academic subjects at school, school children need to learn practical skills that is really necessary.